And after all that's said and done...
I'm still not sure of how I felt,
or how I feel now.
I'm still not sure if it's you I miss,
or just the thought of you.
I'm still not sure what's going on in your head,
or in mine for that matter.
I laugh at your idioticy,
'cause I know you can't help it.
I worry about your stupidity.
'cause sometimes you don't think first.
I tire from your two tonal personailty,
'cause it makes it twice as hard to understand you.
But guess what?
I should just stop making little things a problem.
'Cause at the end of the day,
I should focus on getting you the fuck out of my head.
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Wrote this 18.december.07 and just rediscovered it on my computer this evening. Man, it's weird how I was so angry with him then and now... I feel nothing.
It's true; time heals all wounds. Comments
 Id love to write a mirror image poem to this. Let me know if I can.
-- I am the thunder The rain transformed  I hope you're right--that time heals all wounds. I think I've begun to feel the heal, but, it's not quite finished yet. As for critique, I'm not a member so I can't officially give it to you. But, the seriousness of the poem fades a little when you use the word "outta." I would replace it with "out of." And, just as to add a Creative feel to it, I would use under-case letters at the start of lines that don't start a new sentence. I find that sometimes that helps the flow, though in the end it is up to the author. Just some food for thought.
 .-- "I feel better now I know that I'm different."--Vanilla Sky  Jesus! and i thought my artistic emo temperament was bad! tehehe
 -- "If a bullet should enter my brain, let that bullet destroy every closet door" - Harvey Milk Of course you can.
-- Yeah I know I use too many exclamations, I just happen to be a very excitable person... So shut the fuck up!  Yeeeeeeah, although you end results are a lot more impressive and artistic than my own... -- Yeah I know I use too many exclamations, I just happen to be a very excitable person... So shut the fuck up! Oh it does honey. Sometimes it takes a while but you definately get there
I see what you mean there, so I definately took your advice and changed it. Now I feel the poem is better for it, so thankies! -- Yeah I know I use too many exclamations, I just happen to be a very excitable person... So shut the fuck up! You're welcome.
-- "I feel better now I know that I'm different."--Vanilla Sky |
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